Feedback: Describe a Memorable Journey

Abdullah Al Nayem
March 15, 2024
10:30 AM

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Overall Assessment
Overall Band Score
5.5
Target Score
7.5
Fluency & Coherence5.5
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range5.0
Pronunciation6.0

You can communicate basic ideas but need to work on fluency and grammar

You can communicate basic ideas about familiar topics like travel, but you often struggle to express yourself clearly. Your speech has many pauses and repeated words, which makes it hard to follow at times. You use mostly simple, everyday vocabulary and make regular grammar mistakes with tenses and articles. These errors sometimes make your meaning unclear. Your pronunciation is good enough to be understood most of the time, which helps listeners follow your main ideas despite the grammar issues.

Part-wise Analysis

Question 1

Do you like traveling?

Your Response

"Yes, I like, um, traveling. It's very, uh, interesting for me because I can, you know, see new place and, um, different culture. When I traveling, I am very happy and I can, uh, forget about my job and the problem in my life."

Feedback & Analysis

Your answer is too simple and has several grammar mistakes. You said 'when I traveling' instead of 'when I travel' or 'when I'm traveling'. Also, 'new place' should be 'new places' and 'the problem' should be 'problems'. The pauses make it hard to follow your ideas smoothly.

Improved Answer

"Yes, absolutely! I'm really passionate about traveling because it gives me a chance to explore unfamiliar destinations and experience different cultures firsthand. Whenever I travel, I feel genuinely happy and refreshed, as it allows me to escape from my work routine and daily stresses."

Performance Summary - Part 1

5.5/9

You gave short answers to the Part 1 questions with some basic details. You used simple words and grammar, and there were many pauses ('um', 'uh') that interrupted your speech. You did try to give reasons for your answers, which is good, but your ideas weren't fully explained.

You did well by adding some personal details to your answers instead of just saying 'yes' or 'no'. For example, you mentioned that traveling makes you happy and helps you forget about work - this shows you're trying to extend your answers.

Try to speak more smoothly by reducing 'um' and 'uh'. Before the test, practice speaking about common topics for 30 seconds without stopping. Also, learn to use linking words like 'additionally', 'for instance', and 'in particular' to connect your ideas better.

Cue Card Topic

Describe a memorable journey you have made

  • Where you went
  • Who you went with
  • What you did during the journey
  • Why this journey was memorable

Your Response

"Okay, um, so I want to talking about my trip to Japan. This trip, uh, it was last year, I think in April or May. I go with my friend Emma. We knowing each other from university time and we are very close friend. So we decide to go Japan for two week. Um, in first week, we staying in Tokyo. Tokyo is very big city and, uh, we visited many place there. We go to Shibuya - it's very famous place with many people crossing the street. We also go to temple, I think the name is Senso-ji. It was, um, very beautiful and old. And we wake up very early, like 5 o'clock in morning to go fish market. We seeing many type of fish there and, uh, it was interesting to watch. We also go to many cafe in Tokyo because, um, Japanese cafe is very different and unique. After Tokyo, we go to Kyoto for second week. Kyoto is more, um, traditional than Tokyo. We visited many temple and garden there. Very beautiful. We also walking in bamboo forest - this was my favorite thing. The bamboo was very tall and, um, it was very quiet and peaceful there. So, um, why this trip is memorable for me? Because, uh, everything was very different from my country. The food is different, the culture is different, people behavior is different. Everything is new for me. And, um, I spend very good time with my best friend Emma. We have many fun together and this make the trip more special for me."

Feedback & Analysis

You covered most of the points on the cue card and told a complete story about your trip to Japan. However, you made many grammar mistakes, especially with past tense verbs. You also repeated the same simple words too often and had trouble finding the right vocabulary to describe your experiences.

Improved Answer

"I'd like to tell you about an unforgettable trip I took to Japan last spring with my closest friend, Emma, whom I've known since our university days. We spent a full fortnight exploring two contrasting cities: Tokyo and Kyoto. During our first week in Tokyo, we immersed ourselves in the city's vibrant energy. We witnessed the famous Shibuya crossing at its busiest, explored the ancient Senso-ji temple in Asakusa, and experienced the fascinating pre-dawn tuna auction at Tsukiji fish market. Between sightseeing, we discovered countless charming cafes, each with its own unique atmosphere and exceptional attention to detail. Our second week in Kyoto offered a completely different experience. This more traditional city captivated us with its numerous temples, meticulously maintained gardens, and the breathtaking Arashiyama bamboo grove, which provided an almost meditative atmosphere. What made this journey truly memorable was the striking cultural contrast I experienced. Everything from the cuisine and social customs to people's behavior patterns differed dramatically from what I'm accustomed to at home. Moreover, sharing these extraordinary moments with my dearest friend, creating countless joyful memories together, made the entire experience even more meaningful and special."

Performance Summary - Part 2

5.5/9

You covered most of the points on the cue card and told a complete story about your trip to Japan. However, you made many grammar mistakes, especially with past tense verbs. You also repeated the same simple words too often and had trouble finding the right vocabulary to describe your experiences.

You successfully talked about all the main points: where you went, who you went with, what you did, and why it was memorable. Your story had a clear structure - first Tokyo, then Kyoto, then your conclusion. This organization helped make your answer easier to follow.

Your biggest issue here is grammar, especially past tense. You said 'we go' when you should say 'we went', and 'it was very nice' is too simple and repetitive. Before your test, practice telling stories about your past experiences using correct past tense. Also, replace basic words like 'nice', 'good', and 'very' with more specific descriptive words.

Question 1

What are the benefits of traveling to different countries?

Your Response

"Um, I think traveling to other country is good for people because, uh, you learn about different culture. Like, when you go to different place, you can see how people living there and what is their tradition and food. This make you more, um, open-mind, I think. Also, um, traveling is helping for education because you learn many thing that you don't learn from book or school. And, uh, you can making friend from different country, which is nice."

Feedback & Analysis

You gave three main ideas (learning culture, education, making friends), which is good. However, you didn't explain any of these points in detail. Also, there are grammar errors: 'other country' should be 'other countries', 'how people living' should be 'how people live', and 'you can making' should be 'you can make'. Your vocabulary is quite basic - try to use more specific words instead of 'good', 'nice', and 'many thing'.

Improved Answer

"International travel offers several significant benefits. Firstly, it dramatically expands our cultural awareness by allowing us to observe firsthand how different societies function, from their daily routines to their traditions and culinary practices. This exposure naturally develops our empathy and challenges our preconceived notions about how people should live. Secondly, travel serves as an invaluable form of experiential education, teaching us lessons about history, geography, and human behavior that no textbook can adequately convey. Finally, it provides wonderful opportunities to forge meaningful friendships across cultural boundaries, which can enrich our lives and broaden our perspectives for years to come."

Performance Summary - Part 3

5.5/9

You tried to answer the abstract questions in Part 3, but your answers were quite short and didn't explore the topics deeply. You gave your opinion but didn't explain it with enough detail or examples. Your grammar mistakes continued, especially with verb forms and sentence structure.

You did manage to give your personal opinion on both questions and you attempted to support your ideas with reasons. You also tried to think about different aspects of tourism, mentioning both positive and negative points, which shows good critical thinking.

In Part 3, you need to develop your ideas much more. When you give an opinion, follow it with a clear explanation and a specific example. For instance, instead of just saying 'travel makes you open-minded', explain HOW it makes you open-minded and give a real example from your experience or from what you've observed.

Criteria-wise Analysis

Feedback

Your speech has frequent pauses and hesitations that interrupt the flow. You rely heavily on filler words like 'um' and 'uh', which makes it harder to follow your ideas. While you can generally organize your thoughts in a logical order, especially in Part 2, the constant interruptions affect your overall fluency. You use mostly simple linking words and repeat them often.

What you did well

You organized your Part 2 story in a clear sequence

You described your trip chronologically - first week in Tokyo, second week in Kyoto, then your overall reflection. This clear structure made it easy for the listener to follow your story. You also used time markers like 'first week' and 'after Tokyo', which helped guide the listener through your narrative.

You were able to speak at length without stopping completely

In Part 2, you managed to keep talking for the full 2 minutes, which shows you can maintain speech even when you're struggling to find words. This persistence is important - you didn't give up or stop speaking, which demonstrates good test-taking skills.

What you can improve

Reduce your use of filler words through practice

You said 'um' 24 times, 'uh' 19 times, 'like' 9 times, and 'you know' 6 times during the test. These fillers slow you down and make your speech less fluent. Practice speaking about common topics for 1-2 minutes while recording yourself. Listen back and count your fillers. Then try again, consciously pausing silently instead of using fillers. A brief silent pause sounds more natural than constant 'um' and 'uh'.

Learn and use a wider variety of linking words

You used 'and' 28 times and 'because' 11 times in your speaking test. While these words are correct, overusing them makes your speech sound repetitive. Try learning phrases like 'in addition to this', 'as a result', 'on the other hand', 'for instance', and 'what I mean is'. Write these on flashcards and practice using them when you speak about different topics.

Feedback

You know enough vocabulary to talk about familiar topics like travel, but you use very simple, everyday words most of the time. You repeat the same basic adjectives ('nice', 'good', 'beautiful', 'very') too often. You tried some topic-specific words, which is positive, but your range is still quite limited.

What you did well

You used appropriate travel-related vocabulary

When describing your Japan trip, you used relevant words like 'temple', 'fish market', 'bamboo forest', and 'cafe'. This shows you can recall and use topic-specific vocabulary when talking about familiar subjects. You also mentioned specific place names like 'Shibuya' and 'Senso-ji', which added authenticity to your story.

What you can improve

Stop using 'very' with simple adjectives - use stronger words instead

You said 'very beautiful' four times, 'very different' three times, and 'very good' twice. Instead of 'very beautiful', try 'stunning', 'breathtaking', or 'gorgeous'. Instead of 'very good', use 'excellent', 'wonderful', or 'fantastic'. Make a list of your most-used 'very + adjective' combinations and learn better alternatives. This one change will improve your vocabulary score significantly.

Feedback

You make frequent grammar mistakes that sometimes make your meaning unclear. Your biggest problems are with verb tenses (especially past tense), plural forms, and articles (a, an, the). You try to use some complex sentences, which is good, but they often contain errors.

What you did well

You attempted to use some complex sentence structures

You tried sentences like 'When you go to different place, you can see how people living there' and 'We also walking in bamboo forest - this was my favorite thing'. Even though these sentences have errors, it's good that you're attempting to combine ideas rather than just using simple sentences. This shows you understand what complex sentences should look like.

What you can improve

Focus on using past tense correctly when telling stories

You made many past tense errors in Part 2. You said 'we go to Kyoto' instead of 'we went', 'we staying' instead of 'we stayed', and 'we seeing' instead of 'we saw'. This is a critical area to fix. Practice by writing 5 short stories about your past experiences, then read them aloud. Record yourself and check every verb - is it in the correct past tense form? Regular practice with this will help you catch these errors during the actual test.

Feedback

Your pronunciation is generally clear and you can be understood most of the time. You pronounce individual words correctly in most cases, though you sometimes struggle with longer or less familiar words. Your intonation is quite flat with little variation, which makes your speech sound monotonous. Word stress is usually appropriate, but you could work on using stress and intonation to emphasize key points.

What you did well

Your individual word pronunciation is generally accurate

You pronounced most common words clearly, including place names like 'Tokyo', 'Kyoto', 'Shibuya', and 'Senso-ji'. Your consonant and vowel sounds are mostly correct, which means the examiner could understand you without difficulty. This is a solid foundation to build on.

You speak at a reasonable pace for understanding

Even though you had many pauses, when you were actually speaking, your pace was appropriate. You didn't rush through words, which helped maintain clarity. This shows good awareness of the need to be understood.

What you can improve

Work on your intonation and stress patterns

Your speech sounds quite flat because you use the same tone throughout. In English, we use rising intonation for questions and to show uncertainty, and falling intonation for statements. We also stress important words in a sentence to show emphasis. Practice by listening to native speakers and mimicking their intonation patterns. Record yourself reading aloud from articles or books, paying attention to which words you emphasize and how your voice rises and falls.

Practice connected speech and natural rhythm

You tend to pronounce each word separately, which makes your speech sound choppy. In natural English, words flow together - for example, 'went to' sounds like 'wentə', and 'a lot of' sounds like 'alotta'. Listen to podcasts or watch English videos, and pay attention to how words connect. Practice speaking common phrases as one unit rather than individual words.

Language Analysis

Vocabulary Usage

198
Unique Words
45%
Word Variation
15
Academic Words
Basic
82%
Common vocabulary usage
Advanced
18%
Sophisticated vocabulary usage

Grammar & Sentence Structure

51.0%
Simple
28.0%
Complex
21.0%
Compound

Average Sentence Length

11.8 words

Speech Analytics

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Speaking Rate

Average: 108 words/minTarget: 120-150 wpm

Consistency: Inconsistent - many pauses slow down your speech

Hesitation Analysis

Filler Words

"um"24x
"uh"19x
"like"9x
"you know"6x

Major Hesitations

When trying to explain abstract concepts in Part 309:15
When searching for specific vocabulary during Part 205:45
When attempting to use more complex grammar07:20

Silence Analysis

8
Extended Pauses
2.8s
Average Duration
5.2s
Longest Pause

Intonation Pattern

Quite flat with little variation - practice reading aloud with expression to improve this